I am a year 6 student and a school leader at Papakura Central School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 5 and in the Kahikatea hub and my teachers are Whea Sharlee and Whea Tamzin.This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
When I first stepped on the moon I knew I could jump high I leaped into space and knew I could fly I flipped and flopped but only could float into space and into the cold.
Wow this is an interesting poem with a pretty cool twist ( aye ;) see what I did there). Anyhow the start is really fantastic and dream-like then 'flipped' and 'flopped' sound great one after the other and then you pull a great twist at the end with a not so happy ending. I hope you enjoyed this task and I look forward to when you start posting again.
Hey Leslie,
ReplyDeleteWow this is an interesting poem with a pretty cool twist ( aye ;) see what I did there). Anyhow the start is really fantastic and dream-like then 'flipped' and 'flopped' sound great one after the other and then you pull a great twist at the end with a not so happy ending. I hope you enjoyed this task and I look forward to when you start posting again.
See you in the comments.
Daniel :)